23 Jan 12, 12:21AM
My main issue with the song is the main motif :)
I like it, however I hear it way too often in the song. At this point, you should start thinking about the form for your song. What I hear is mainly variations on the A part. You should come up with another nice motif, and use it for the B part. You can mix it with the A part some if you want (probably towards the end). You can use this just to practice. ABA is a very common basic form. Read: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Song_struct...lar_music)
Second issue is with the lead synth. I dont like it. Maybe have it be softer in the beginning. Maybe try filtering out some high frequencies. Play around with the sound some more, to see what you can change it to. Its hard for me to figure out why I dont like it, sorry :(
This is a good improvement from your last songs.
I like it, however I hear it way too often in the song. At this point, you should start thinking about the form for your song. What I hear is mainly variations on the A part. You should come up with another nice motif, and use it for the B part. You can mix it with the A part some if you want (probably towards the end). You can use this just to practice. ABA is a very common basic form. Read: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Song_struct...lar_music)
Second issue is with the lead synth. I dont like it. Maybe have it be softer in the beginning. Maybe try filtering out some high frequencies. Play around with the sound some more, to see what you can change it to. Its hard for me to figure out why I dont like it, sorry :(
This is a good improvement from your last songs.